Monday, April 9, 2018

I is for Indriso and In Faith

Vanity plates in Maine that start with I...and a poem form beginning with I...and they both go together...






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In Faith

By faith I know the roaring sun will reappear to face us,

the sleepy moon will return changed in the night,
 
and the pouring rains will fill soil with sustenance.

By faith I know the green grass blades will creep in cracks to fill gaps
and my heart will stand for good despite the dark.
I plant lilac and rose to fill breezes while we're here.


In faith and by faith I am walking;

This I know, it’s the sweetest way to go.

by Donna JT Smith ©2018

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This morning, after reading it last night and not being content with it, I rewrote.
 
In Faith 
 
By faith I know the roaring sun will reappear face bright,

the sleepy moon will return changed each night,
 
and the pouring rain will fill soil with its might.

By faith I know the grass will creep in cracks, greening spaces,
my sore heart will stand for good and look for soothing graces,
and lilac and rose will I plant to fill breezes with their traces.


In faith and by faith I am walking, this I know.

Faith is by far, the sweetest way to go.

by Donna JT Smith ©2018
 
 
Indriso has  two terzains and two one-line stanzas (3-3-1-1), with free use of the number of syllables in its verses. It admits all grades and types of rhyme. 

http://poeticconnections21.blogspot.co.uk/2011/05/what-is-indriso.html


Here's a nice one.  I tried writing one for this, but it just didn't take...
Feel free to try it!




9 comments:

  1. Another great one! I'm not sure if I like your first version or your 2nd version better. But it's awesome to see what revisions can do. Nice job!
    Melanie's Stories

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    1. Yes, I'm intrigued by writing different versions of the same poem lately!

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  2. Isn’t this lovely! Both of them! Amen.

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  3. Indriso is something I discovered very recently. I like your poems.

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    1. This is the first time I've heard of this form also. Thanks for stopping by!

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  4. Very lovely. Faith is wonderful and it's exciting to find faith advertised or shared in such interesting places. I just stopped by from the challenge to say hello.

    Melissa @Sugar Crime Scene

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