Monday, April 11, 2011

A Pantoum for Youm...

Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines 
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a 
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing 
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
 
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
 
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and 
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of 
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first 
line of the poem is also the last.
 
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

Okay, this was fun!  It's easier to read the examples as you read the formula.  It's not so complicated then.
Inspiration was from one of my students who at the end of the day said "It seemed like a half day!".  And he was right.  It seemed like it to me, too.  I'd changed the pattern of the day since it's the week before vacation and I wanted to try some different things for this last quarter.  I guess it was good.

I must have done something right
"It seemed like a half day," he said.
His eyes were sparkly and bright.
Was it because his mind was fed?

"It seemed like a half day," he said.
The day barely started, then was through -
Was it because his mind was fed?
Perhaps because he'd learned something new.

The day barely started, then was through -
He had a big grin upon his face,
Perhaps because he'd learned something new,
It seemed he really liked this place.

He had a big grin upon his face
His eyes were sparkly and bright.
It seemed he really liked this place,
I must have done something right.

1 comment:

  1. Oh, I love pantoums. They sound so very good! As does yours, & the fact that you 'found' the line at school from a student is just great. Your words swing along nicely. You added much to the post with the title, too.

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