Wednesday, October 8, 2014

Did You Ever Feel Like Dirt?

Today at Poetry Jam, the challenge is to "write a 'If I were' poem. Feel free to be whoever or whatever you’d like to be. What would you do? How would you feel?"

Did You Ever Feel Like Dirt? 

i am
the salt
the dust brought back
the ashes returned
deep i am
giving life
accepting death
hands sift
roots permeate
rocks tumble and
crumble
becoming
grower
and salter
and duster
ashes
of all
the world
i am



©Donna JT Smith

24 comments:

  1. Ah, eventually everything, no matter what, does return to ashes. No avoiding it! Smiles.

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    1. Inevitable, and so we all become a part of the earth.

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  2. Pain and commitment and the paradox of life. This works on so many levels. Great piece.

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    1. I like when you can get more than one thing out of a piece. I don't often do that.

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  3. giving life and accepting death...one of the greater challenges in this world...
    i try to be the salt...smiles.

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  4. a time worn cliche, with all the realism of everyday disappointments, well done

    have a good Wednesday

    much love...

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    1. The cliche came after the poem - seemed to fit! Thanks for visiting!

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  5. True but a little grim. I guess we can try to add a bit of salt to the world rather than focus on the dust and ashes.

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    1. I hadn't intended to be grim, but I can see how it might read that way. I was going more for grime than grim - lol!

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  6. Interesting. I would not have thought of being dirt. Neat.

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    1. Could have gone a different way with it - like mud? Thanks for dropping in!

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  7. I like this. Makes me think of the beginning and the end - life and death, dust to dust. And we all have a good amount of salt in between, I hope.

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    1. Salt - a powerful enhancer! Thanks for stopping in, Myrna!

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  8. I can read it several ways, Donna, for meaning, & actually it's a reverso poem, too. Terrific.

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    1. Thanks, Linda! Hope you had a nice writing time! Someday I am going to do one of those workshop/retreats. Sounds like fun.

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  9. Clever to reverse the poem. In the scheme of things we will all end up as dust. So what matters is how much happiness and love we can give to others otherwise there is no point to being alive ...

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    1. Ah, yes, salted well with happiness and love!

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  10. Some days I feel like nobody in the city, smiles ~ Of course someday we will all be dust and ash on this earth ~

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    1. We contribute what we can while we are here... Thanks for reading!

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  11. Ashes to ashes. A very thoughtful and thought provoking piece, Donna.

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    1. So many parts to the earth...including ourselves. Thanks for stopping by!

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  12. Accepting death...ahh that is so hard. But then, there is new life after it. I like your take.

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  13. This is a powerful memento mori for all of us. Like ++++

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